Kumala Sari
Long time ago, in a village, lived a poor
family that had a doughter named Kumala Sari. This family lived in a house that
was made up from woods and it was very uncomfortable to be lived. The father’s
named Tatang and his wife named Nining. Mr.Tatang worked as a gardener in a
rich family’sgarden while his wife was a housewife.
Kumala Sari, who called Lala, is a famous
girl in her village because of her appearance. Lala had a lot of friends in her
neighborhood and most of them were in the school. Lala did not continue her
study to Senior High School because of economic problems. As we know, her father
worked as a gardener and he only got low wages. Beside that, her mother did not
have a job, but sometimes she helped her husband in the garden.
One day, Lala wanted to go downtown to look for a job because she
thought that she could change her life if she had a job. At night, she told
about it to her parents, but they did not allow her to go downtown. It really
made Lala sad and locked herself in her room. Actually, Mr. Tatang and Mrs.
Nining had their own reason why they did not allow Lala to go downtown. They
did not want their only daughter far away from them, but Lala did not know
about it. She mantained not to eat even though her parents had been asked her
to eat for many times. It made her parents felt so sad.
Mr. Tatang and Mrs. Nining understood how
their daughter’s feeling. They had done their best to make Lala understood ,
but Lala never believed them. Therefore, they decided not to bother Lala and
let Lala locked herself inside of her
room.After several days, around two days, Lala got stomachache and she must go
to the doctor. Her parents, Mr. Tatang and Mrs. Nining, did not have enough
facilities such as money and transportation to bring Lala to go to the doctor.
They were absolutely panic and did not know what to do. As a result, Lala brought
to an old man that was a paranormal. He live in a old house which was made from
woods. They told him about her daughter’s illness and that old man gave several
suggestions about it. Mr. Tatang and Mrs. Nining did all paranormal’s
suggestions to cure Lala.
In fact,Lala’sstomachache could not be cured. It made Lala could not
eat and do anything well because of her
illness. Sometimes, she got anger to her parents and asked them why they did
not bring her to the doctor. She did not understand about her parents’
condition. Her parents became more panic and asked to the paranormal why her
daughter could not be health. They had already brought her to him for many
times. That old man could not do anything because he had done his best to cure
Lala, but it was failed. Lala’s parents prayed for their daughter’s health
everyday even almost every time. They hopped their daughter got well as soon as
possible because they loved Lala very much.
Next day, a grandmother came to Lala’s house. Tatang and Nining did
not know where the grandmother came from, but they allowed that grandmother to
came in. After talked for a while, the grandmother asked them whether her
daughter was sick or not. Tatang and Nining invited her to see Lala’s condition
in her room. After looking at Lala for several seconds, the grandmother asked
Lala to ask for apology to her parents because she often made her parents felt
very sad.
Finally,Lala could be cured after she asked for apology to her
parents. They could understood with their daughter’s behavior which often got anger at them. Lala promised
that she would not make her parents sad anymore. She loved her parents so much
and so did her parents.
-the end-
This story is based on my true experience in my neighborhood. When
my writing 2 lecturer asked me to write down my own story, I immediately
remember with my neighbor who has a daughter named Lala. In this story, I did
not write it exactly the same to the real one, but I added some fiction sense
on it.
Let’s begin to the real story. Lala was a
15 years old who did not continue her study to Senior High School bacause of
economic problems. She came from a quits poor family. Her father works in the
rice field while her mother as a housewife. However, in my story, I wrote that
her father worked as a gardener in a rich family.
Another one is the illness that Lala has.
In the real one, Lala did not got stomachache but cancer which had attacked her
since she was in elementary school. In my own story, I wrote that Lala got
stomachache because I did not want to make she sad if she read this story.
Actually
in real story, Lala’s parents brought Lala to the doctor and they had enough
money for it. While in this story, I write that lala’s parents did not bring
Lala to the doctor because they did not have enough money. It is bacause I want
to emphasize that Lala’s family is really poor.
Whenever I read this story, I always
remember my family and miss them so much. By reading this story, I hope we can
get the moral value that is presented on it.
Kumala Sari
Long time ago, in a village, lived a poor
family that had a doughter named Kumala Sari. This family lived in a house that
was made up from woods and it was very uncomfortable to be lived. The father’s
named Tatang and his wife named Nining. Mr.Tatang worked as a gardener in a
rich family’sgarden while his wife was a housewife.
Kumala Sari, who called Lala, is a famous
girl in her village because of her appearance. Lala had a lot of friends in her
neighborhood and most of them were in the school. Lala did not continue her
study to Senior High School because of economic problems. As we know, her father
worked as a gardener and he only got low wages. Beside that, her mother did not
have a job, but sometimes she helped her husband in the garden.
One day, Lala wanted to go downtown to look for a job because she
thought that she could change her life if she had a job. At night, she told
about it to her parents, but they did not allow her to go downtown. It really
made Lala sad and locked herself in her room. Actually, Mr. Tatang and Mrs.
Nining had their own reason why they did not allow Lala to go downtown. They
did not want their only daughter far away from them, but Lala did not know
about it. She mantained not to eat even though her parents had been asked her
to eat for many times. It made her parents felt so sad.
Mr. Tatang and Mrs. Nining understood how
their daughter’s feeling. They had done their best to make Lala understood ,
but Lala never believed them. Therefore, they decided not to bother Lala and
let Lala locked herself inside of her
room.After several days, around two days, Lala got stomachache and she must go
to the doctor. Her parents, Mr. Tatang and Mrs. Nining, did not have enough
facilities such as money and transportation to bring Lala to go to the doctor.
They were absolutely panic and did not know what to do. As a result, Lala brought
to an old man that was a paranormal. He live in a old house which was made from
woods. They told him about her daughter’s illness and that old man gave several
suggestions about it. Mr. Tatang and Mrs. Nining did all paranormal’s
suggestions to cure Lala.
In fact,Lala’sstomachache could not be cured. It made Lala could not
eat and do anything well because of her
illness. Sometimes, she got anger to her parents and asked them why they did
not bring her to the doctor. She did not understand about her parents’
condition. Her parents became more panic and asked to the paranormal why her
daughter could not be health. They had already brought her to him for many
times. That old man could not do anything because he had done his best to cure
Lala, but it was failed. Lala’s parents prayed for their daughter’s health
everyday even almost every time. They hopped their daughter got well as soon as
possible because they loved Lala very much.
Next day, a grandmother came to Lala’s house. Tatang and Nining did
not know where the grandmother came from, but they allowed that grandmother to
came in. After talked for a while, the grandmother asked them whether her
daughter was sick or not. Tatang and Nining invited her to see Lala’s condition
in her room. After looking at Lala for several seconds, the grandmother asked
Lala to ask for apology to her parents because she often made her parents felt
very sad.
Finally,Lala could be cured after she asked for apology to her
parents. They could understood with their daughter’s behavior which often got anger at them. Lala promised
that she would not make her parents sad anymore. She loved her parents so much
and so did her parents.
-the end-
This story is based on my true experience in my neighborhood. When
my writing 2 lecturer asked me to write down my own story, I immediately
remember with my neighbor who has a daughter named Lala. In this story, I did
not write it exactly the same to the real one, but I added some fiction sense
on it.
Let’s begin to the real story. Lala was a
15 years old who did not continue her study to Senior High School bacause of
economic problems. She came from a quits poor family. Her father works in the
rice field while her mother as a housewife. However, in my story, I wrote that
her father worked as a gardener in a rich family.
Another one is the illness that Lala has.
In the real one, Lala did not got stomachache but cancer which had attacked her
since she was in elementary school. In my own story, I wrote that Lala got
stomachache because I did not want to make she sad if she read this story.
Actually
in real story, Lala’s parents brought Lala to the doctor and they had enough
money for it. While in this story, I write that lala’s parents did not bring
Lala to the doctor because they did not have enough money. It is bacause I want
to emphasize that Lala’s family is really poor.
Whenever I read this story, I always
remember my family and miss them so much. By reading this story, I hope we can
get the moral value that is presented on it.
Many things that we can learn from your story,
BalasHapusnice job :)
thanks Desri Wahyuni,,, :)
BalasHapusits a good story, but there are some mistakes should be fixed.
BalasHapusP2:L1 "Kumala Sari, who called Lala, was a famous girl....".
P3:L3 " to go to downtown".
P4:L7 " he lived in a old house..."
that all.
thanks Ira.. it really help me.. :)
Hapusit's a nice story Mega, but I want to comment about the grammar in last paragraph :
BalasHapus"They could understood". I think, it should be "They could understand" because as I know, "Could + V1".
Overall, I love your story.
Good job.
thanks ridha for your suggestion.. :)
HapusI like the way you develop your story,,, hope that you never be Kumala Sari,, hehee :)
BalasHapusthanks a lot aling.. :)
Hapusi hope so..
nice story Ga, n we also can get the moral value from your story :)
BalasHapusbtw, i agree with ridha's opinion ;)
keep fighting^^
wow, what a neck hanging story. >_<
BalasHapuswe know that Lala love her family, but what happen next... ??, are they still live poorly ever after..??
ahhh, interesting story by the way...
thanks oji.. they were still a poor family,,
Hapussorry,, because I didn't mention it.. :)
i get more moral value from your story... be careful with the punctuation, keep writing and create new story. :)
BalasHapusnice story ga, i'd like to read your story.. :)
BalasHapusGood story,
BalasHapusI like it ,, and I get the moral value from your story.. :)
thanks guys guys for all your comments,, :)
BalasHapusnice story mega....
BalasHapuswe can get many lessons from your story....
thank you guys... :)
BalasHapusnice story mega
BalasHapusbut I think, could or modal always follow by V1
:)
Nice story mega, i like how way you develop it
BalasHapusok fio,, :) thaks a lot.. :)
BalasHapus